I’ve re-done chapter one. Each scene came out as more words which made me feel right about it. Things have gotten a little more intense as to what causes Marianna to become cursed as she is. I think it’s a better reason than before and I hope it comes off well.
I’m also going to lose the intro. I think I can agree with the authonomy reviews that I don’t need it. I can explain as I go.
Descriptions are lacking. Trying to talk about the way a person looks without it being boring is…well a bitch so that will be tweaked later. for now I’m happy. I will work on Chapter 2 tomorrow if I can.
Since the beginning is changing I think more things will change. I’m hoping that it will make for a better story.
We shall see!!